Quiet Always

Quiet Always


photo by Elene Usdin


Drunk he came daily,
hardly caring for family,
I remained quiet,
in hope he will come to light,
that was extent of my trust.

Lethargic in his duties,
blunt in capabilities,
I remained quiet,
in hope he will never fight,
that was extent of my love.

A quarrel became violent,
with my death it came to end,
with open eyes, I remained quiet,
in hope to see you again in my sight
that was the extent of my wait.

This poem is linked to Magpie Tales #249 ( photo), Poetry Jam (Quiet), Three Word Wednesday #405 ( blunt, drunk , lethargic )


Comments

  1. A lot of things moving in wrong directions can well create the unnecessary tensions. Glad that it is all faced up with intelligent thinking!

    Hank

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  2. Sometimes we need to make our voices heard..not fight back but fight for ourselves perhaps...as always powerful and distinctively restrained...which leaves an even stronger empathy for your character

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  3. Giving way a little can go a long way to maintain the ties! Love conquers all. Wonderful verse cifar!

    Hank

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  4. Sad and frightening - well written.

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  5. oy sometimes staying quiet may not be the best thing...especially when we see someone going down a path that is unhealthy...though they dont always want to hear it either...hard for me to stay quiet...smiles.

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  6. I like how you built up the progression in your poem until the tragic outcome.

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  7. Oh my -- what a powerful piece. And death IS the ultimate 'quiet,' isn't it?

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  8. the exent of my wait...oh!

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  9. What a sad tale this is. Even with caution this seemed to end badly for the person speaking in the poem. I guess quiet does not always work. Thank you for sharing this.

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  10. Cifar,

    Quitetness can stay for a while, until there is a point of no return..Especially if the ending is of a violent nature..Fear is in charge..

    Eileen

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  11. this is certainly intense, as Wendy says, it was also surprising for me, that it ended thus

    much love...

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  12. Great job Cifar ! Incredible emotions.

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