The Monsoon Pain
This post has been published by me as a part of Blog-a-Ton 55; the fifty-fifth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. In association with Rashmi Kumar, the author of Hooked, Lined and Single and Jyoti Arora, the author of Lemon Girl.
The Monsoon Pain
Monsoon brings so much emotions one of these is sorrow. Those in pain saw rain as clouds shedding tears for them and partnering their pain to ease their sufferings. I have tried to bring out the grief of a victim of domestic violence in these rain drops or tear drops. ( Its your wish how you see them)
I
think
you are dear
to him as well, since
when you have gone from
here continuous is the rain spell
As rain water has submerged the
courtyard and the garden, I am too
drown in the pain of separation
Until you will not come back
again, unbearable is this
pleasant rain.
I
sit and
see, the wind
blowing the leaves of
tree as you caressed my hair
with your hands. But soon strong
wind made branches to bend like
you twisted my arms to hit strongly
with your hands, I too fell on the
ground in the pool of tears
like these falling leaves
in house's rear.
I
and you
when walked
in the rain together,
everybody used to adore and
around us they all used to gather,
to appreciate that love between us,
but then you created the fuss when
but then you created the fuss when
you punched me in the midst of
the night, they assembled once
the night, they assembled once
again to praise my wounds
in full delight.
I
am now
free from your
oppression with some
one who didn't bound his love
to any outdated tradition. Love is
free so am I from any condition, its
better to leave than suffer and cry in
seclusion. Love has the energy to
ease all pain, like pouring water
relieving this thirsty land
in form of rain.
To bear injustice, inhumanity for whose dignity,
When some one don't care for your self identity.
am now
free from your
oppression with some
one who didn't bound his love
to any outdated tradition. Love is
free so am I from any condition, its
better to leave than suffer and cry in
seclusion. Love has the energy to
ease all pain, like pouring water
relieving this thirsty land
in form of rain.
To bear injustice, inhumanity for whose dignity,
When some one don't care for your self identity.
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This is such a masterpiece. The poem itself, the flow and the way you played around with words so they sort of form a shape in each of the sections is amazing! Hats off!
ReplyDeletethank you Alok Ji, such words adds fuel to my creative journey
DeleteWow! Reading a nice form poetry after a very long time...
ReplyDeleteIve come back to participate at BAT after ages and its nice to discover new bloggers.
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Wish you all the very best for BAT55..:)
Loved the concept of putting the words in form of drops/tears. Also also the love followed by abuse. The daylight vs the dark. Pretension vs Reality. Nice!!
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Cifar,
ReplyDeleteThis is just an outstanding piece! Deserve to be top in my pick list. Poetry in form of Teardrops, too good! Also, I like the way you ended the poem! Keep writing for BAT! All the best!
Someone is Special
thanks Sarav,
DeleteBAT always brings out the best side of me,
Congratulations on the win!
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DeleteRaindrop/tear shape poems, quite uniformly shaped, and flowing from love to abuse. Your take on the BAT topic is unique :) Lovely. All the best, Cifar.
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DeleteWauu I hv no words to praise ...keep it up bro..this is amazing poem.
ReplyDeleteEmotions are weird. And, everything about them is also complex. Sometimes, these complex things are beautiful. Like...these Teardrops.:) Loved this...Fantastic poem.
ReplyDeleteHow different emotions can rain instigate within our minds! For some it's symbolic to the pool of tears pouring within and for some it's a healing ointment. I loved the way you presented the stanzas like raindrops. This is very creative. All the best for BAT.
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When it rains outside, tears pour within... :)
Stunningly beautiful...the thought and the presentation! Awesome indeed!
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thank you
Deleteits beautiful Cifar, I so agree, I love rain and it gets me nostalgic of moments and thus the pain. Loved your words...really loved them!
ReplyDeleteIt's a complete masterpiece Kashif!!! Especially for a rain-baby like me, its bliss! Loved it :-) God bless...
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All I can say about your poem is 'heart touching'!
Thank you.
I fully support your thoughts, Cifar. There is no sense in suffering alone for someone who doesn't care. Marvelous piece of writing :)
ReplyDeleteCifar,
ReplyDeleteWith this soulful, thought provoking yet courageous poem. .you have definitely got yourself a follower. I'm impressed and awestruck with how thoughtfully you have woven these words into this beautiful "tear-drops".
Truly amazing. .not to forget the message and the rhyme just makes it one of my favourites in Bat55.
Regards,
Megha.
Thanks Megha,
DeleteSuch words of appreciation motivates for the work which is worthy of impressing others.
Cifar,
ReplyDeleteThis is soulful. I have heard a lot about your writing skills from Sarav, and it is so true.
Thank you so much for your encouraging words on my blog post. It means a lot to me.
Vidhya
delightful to hear my writing skills are discussed among talented people, thank you
DeleteBeautiful words Cifar. Great to find a poem on monsoon in the shape of drops. Congratulations on the win.
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